They pollinate plants, build neat structures, and make honey. What's not to like?

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>>16491
Nice. I give it a 🅱️/🅱️.

Starting to write a small short but I got a problem.

See the short will be about some dumb smoe falling in love at first sight with a youkai. Problem is, a youkai's a youkai but THIS youkai will definitely eat or kill a human if given the opportunity.

But the protag's too lovestruck to see the danger in it and so their view of the interaction would be something like.

"I decided to try and visit her again in the middle of the night during a full moon. It's light shining through the woods just gives an romantic atmosphere and I'm certain my love will be happy to see me."

And

"She didn't say anything when we met for the first time but her sudden gaze into my eyes showed such an intense hunger that I just knew she was into me too."

And.


"Finally I saw her again, the girl of my dreams. She was covered in some tomato sauce and a person under her was pretending to be dead, knowing we wanted some privacy (What a great guy!). Seeing this opportunity, I approached her with firm steps.

She didn't say a word as watched me approach, her gaze once again made my heart skip a beat and I was sweating profusely too. Aah, the love-filled air made it hard to breathe, it was like someone was choking me.

Oh wait, she is choking me. I guess that's her kink, the shy ones are always the craziest."

You can guess the tone of the story by now.

That said here's the problem: I'm not too sure which youkai to make it about.

I know Rumia or Medicine would be a good 'This person will definitely kill humans' contender but...they're a bit too child-like in appearance and I'm not comfy with that.

Then my second thought became Mystia, she's a pretty birdy that sings too so it'd make sense buuuuut I'd feel she would simply rip off the person or something like that for a long-term benefit rather than an easy meal so that's not gonna work either.

So I'm not sure about which youkai it would be about and that's a big deal since that prevents me from finishing the story.

So I'm going to

trying too hard to be clever without saying anything of interest, 2/10, bin recommended

>>16484

Ancient/Feral Nue might be a good fit if you're looking for that type of dynamic. You might want to refine you're plot premise a bit though. it seems pretty basic and lacking of any distinct, artistic flair.

there's this story i remember about a mage or something being told to go to gensokyo and steal Ran's hair to pay his debt (?), i remember the thing about the mc is that he has shit magic power but is really good at magic control so he thief stuff with his magic. anyone knows which story i am talking about?

>>16479
Procurement Specialist?
>>/border/30152

>>16480
oh shit thats it thanks anon, gonna read it again

What is blue?

gee I wonder

I am a blind fish then, sorry for posting at the wrong spot.

>>16446
Alright I looked at that forest story. The main criticism I can give is that the story is very meandering. When I was reading it, I got the feeling that things just sort of happen to Rumia instead of there being a central driving plot guiding Rumia. There used to be a central driving plot at the beginning, where a mysterious disembodied voice gave Rumia a mission to kill all the Anons and promised to guide Rumia on her adventure, but the voice just sort of vanished without explanation after Rumia killed the weird Alice goo monster and fell unconcious.

That's the other main criticism I have with this story. Characters and plot points have a nasty tendency to just sort of disappear from the story without warning. Take Wriggle for example. Wriggle ended up being killed by the Alice goo monster entirely offscreen, with no way for us to influence Wriggles fate. According to the Alice goo monster, it was entirely our fault that Wriggle died, even though the last thing we voted for prior to Wriggle's death was "lets try really hard to beat Wriggle to Marisa's house." Having the result of "lets race Wriggle" be "Wriggle is dead and its all your fault" seems like a rather extreme and unfairly unforeseeable consequence of our actions.

And Wriggle was one of the lucky ones, she actually got an explanation for her disappearance. Some characters don't even get that much. Like the Black Knight Anon that attacked us in Rinnosuke's shop. Rumia gets into a big fight with the knight, covers the area in darkness, and then the knight just sort of disappears. What happened to him, where did he go, what is he doing now? Who knows. He basically just fell out of the story with no explanation. A similar thing happened with the fairies Rumia met in the forest. Rumia attracts a horde of hundreds of fairies and runs to Reimu's shrine to escape them. Rumia spends maybe 10 minutes in the shrine and leaves with Shion through a window, and suddenly the fairies are gone, despite there being hundreds of fairies outside surrounding the shr

>>16448

I've read your criticism and firstly want to thank you for giving them. I'm sure it took some time to write all that and all of those are really good points that you're making.

Now I'm going to explain stuff as much as I can without making any sort of excuses for myself.

>Wriggle death.

That was going to happen anyway, you are absolutely not responsible for that outcome. It's simply something the thing said to make you feel even worse at what it thought was going to be your last moments for that extra juicy tears. The thing was blatantly a sadist and deserved to die. (And would be a nice thing to suddenly remember if you ever you yourself making someone suffer for the same reasons only to end up disgusted by how similar to it you're acting since I don't have the guts to make Rumia into a total monster regardless of how much she hypes herself up to be one).

Wriggle's revival is meant to be a main motivator to keep moving even if you decided to simply not listen to some voice in your head that told you to eat some yummy outsiders. There were multiple ways to achieve it and you're already found one of them so I have to praise you for that.

Heck, once that's achieved.

>Black Knight

Short words: He ran away, seeing how he was already wounded and saw you just cover yourself in darkness and sit on the ground it'd assume you had some counter attack in mind and decided to simply not risk it and run away. You could have pursued him by tracking him or choosing to lose your patience during the darkness waiting game. As for what's it doing now?

It's and its crew got found by Marisa and total party killed once they tried to ambush her. Had you been with her then you could have prevented her kleptomania from getting the better on her and not put on some obviously sus tiara. The rest is history.

>Fairies

For that one I simply wimped out, sure the Hakurei went ahead to go and e

You know what, I'll throw my story into the ring here. In particular, I'd like to know if there's anything in particular that works/doesn't work about my writing style, or any high/lowlights of note in the updates. A lot of what I've been doing has been making things up as I'm going along, so any feedback would be useful.

Urban Student in Limbo: https://www.thp.moe/th/res/202201.html

https://archive.org/details/transactionsasi22japagoog/page/n222/mode/2up

First up, we have a paper on those mysterious mountain-dwelling folk, "The Tengu". It's got more than you ever wanted to know about our nosey pom-pom-wearing neighbours—what kinds of tengu there are, their origins, their eating and possibly even mating habits, and selected myths from every era—courtesy of one Dr. M. W. de Visser from the Asiatic Society of Japan.

Goes from pp. 222–298 in the link.

>>16403
A quick look at that tells me that the tengu are very much a catch-all sort of supernatural creature in Japanese tradition. There's barbarity and oni-like behavior, possessions (and trying to seduce priests while in the bodies of women), transformations, behavior like angry spirits/are ghosts of the dead, tree demons, and a lot of links to Buddhism. They could just as soon be bros and teach humans swordmanship or something else or try to destroy them. There seem to be several mentions of pearls/stones in relation to (greater) tengu. All in all interesting stuff. Even if the source takes that sometime patronizing tone common in Victorian/Edwardian analysis of other cultures.

Of course no such thread could be complete without the oldest record of Japan's myths and legends and indeed the oldest extant written work from Japan, the Kojiki or "Records of Ancient Matters". Being written as they have been in a combination of Old Japanese and contemporaneous Classical Chinese, it is rather awkward in translation—B. H. Chamberlain our English translator going as far as to call them "queer and bald in Japanese ... and it is therefore right, even from a stylistic point of view, that they should sound bald and queer in English"—but still the stories contained within are quite vivid and a careful reader will encounter many familiar names and figures, not least of which include Hieda no Are its original composer and Motoori Norinaga its most prominent latter-day decipherer. One will learn of the cleverer and not-so-clever machinations of Yagokoro Omoikane and Ame no Sagume, the true species of the sisters Toyotamahime and Tamayorihime, and even the rather inauspicious birth of Haniyasubime. Most of all will one learn of the life and times of Ōkuninushi, youngest among eighty brothers and good friend of the White Hare of Inaba, whose story is so often forgotten in popular dissemination in favour of those of Izanagi and Izanami and of Amaterasu and Susanoo—and whose dealings with the heavenly gods of Takamagahara still cast a Moon-shaped shadow over certain parts of Gensokyo to this day.

Only, it is advised that one do indeed consult the footnotes (of which there are regrettably many, coming out to probably thicker than the text itself), and note down what Japanese name corresponds with what English rendering, unless one enjoy reading about the exploits of His-Swift-Impetuous-Male-Augustness in the palace of the Heaven-Shining-Great-August-Deity.

Also, all of the naughty bits are rendered in Latin, because this translation was done nearly a century and a half ago. But, trust me, you're really not missing out on much.

Without further ado:
https://www.sacred-texts.com/shi/kj/index.htm

(Alternative source, in the interest of maximal longevity:

Cirno unironically (and ironically, due to her being the weaker boss in the same game) has the best matchup against Sakuya due to her perfect freeze, which creates an area of (almost?) 0k temperature, which also stops any low energy and any physical projectile in their track immediately.

Assuming Sakuya accelerates her time (rather than stopping everyone else's) it would mean her entering the area of effect of perfect freeze at any point would freeze her solid to the core in what amounts to an instant, which qualifies as an incapacitation, granting Cirno victory.

>>16399
Except Cirno is just the kind of dumbass who would forget that she can even do that. Plus she really has no skin in the game when fairies don't permadeath. She might win by "default" because of it, but that means basically nothing when she probably wouldn't remember what was happening after getting murked yet again. But hollow victories do feel pretty Touhou so I dunno.

>>16400
> Intelligence
Cirno is dumb when it comes to booksmarts but she has shown competency in battle. While Marisa started out playing around with her she has admitted at the end of their battle in Great Fairy Wars that she had to put in real effort towards the end. Mind you what I am saying here is from memory and may differ from what I said in actuality.
Whether she's gonna be strategic enough to pull what I said through is up for debate - maybe there are manga panels showing her being creative with her ice powers, which could set a reasonable precedent for it.

>Win condition
There's reason to assume most folks have ways to incapacitate Cirno; sealing, capturing her tying her up. Reimu wins here by default again. Reisen's insanity works as well.

I'm chipping in for this, too
>>/shorts/2395

There we go.
>>/shorts/2400

I'm glad we had a decent amount of activity! Sorry that I... still haven't updated my story. It WILL happen, I was insanely busy with something else. As in I spent about 30 hours or so on writing related things unrelated to Touhou, out of obligations, and I seriously had no time for much of anything else. Yay!

I'LL FUGGIN GET TO IT! GOOD WORK, EVERYONE ELSE

then who was phone!?
Good luck if you're participating

The effort in this post is appreciated, but you can look at the discussion thread yourself to see that the 30 updates thing was not agreed upon and was rather one poster's assumption that a few others agreed to >>16310 . Others disagreed, as honestly shorts were expected instead. We actually do have a 30 updates in a month thing, but it's in November since that's National Novel Writing Month (NaNoWriMo)

I'm not going to prompt anyone to try to do 30 updates in a month. If they try that's their prerogative, but it's definitely not what everyone agreed on while we were coming up with this

Ah, that's my bad then!

Do ignore this one from now on, and I'll gladly participate in the correct Spooktember!