>Give birth

I wonder if it's a boy or a girl.

Commit sudoku.

>>11163

Our writers are running away from the writingfield! Shamefur Dispray!

Damnit HY...

>>9877

I'D READ THAT

>>10645
Sage, you shameless nigger.

Waste of time.

Just want to say: ~incest ~so wrong ~ so right.

(yes I know I am using "~" wrong, bite me)

[X] Why not? A game'll pass the time 'til she's movin' again.

New thread: >>10609

>>10605
All right~

[x] Both!

Rule One: Every time you take a shot, you have to take a shot.

>>10421
Given the number of shots, you'd die of alcohol poisoning long before the hell bullet'd hit you.

[x] play a danmaku drinking game. What could possibly go wrong?

"We need some paper over here!"

"I'm comin'!"

"The printer here's acting up!"

"Where the hell are the reporters?!"

"Is it lunch time yet?"

"Why are there chips all over the floor?!"

"There's no trash can around anymore!"

"Someone get the nurse, I think he's about to throw up!"

Ah, such is life in the tengu corporation. Wild, hectic and crazy. I don't think I'd prefer it any other way. It certainly beats how the human village was before I left it.

Oh yeah, the human village... I ended up leaving because of a youkai I saw. She made me interested in the world outside the village. I knew it was dangerous, and everyone thought I was insane, brave or just dumb. Later on, I would meet this youkai that ultimately led me to my journey outside the village, and I would fall in love with her. But she would end up not returning my feelings properly... so in the end, I fell in love with another youkai.

"Satoshi! Please hand me that stack of paper!"

"R-Right! Here!"

A hard working, energetic and pretty white wolf tengu, named Momizi. She came to me very similarly to how my previous, unrequited love did, and in the end, I fell in love with her very much the same way too. She opened my eyes to the troubles and strife of youkai, and helped me learn that youkai have the same problems as humans often do. It was through her that I found out that youkai and humans truly are very alike in many ways, and because of that, I've been trying to work towards uniting them as a more equal whole. The first step was obviously trying to convince the tengu that, as one of their own becoming involved with an outsider was seen as treason, and grounds for execution. Rather then run away, I stood up to them together with Momizi, and tried to set things straight. That they shouldn't be so exclusive with their peers, that they should be able to do what they want, and that they should support them for their cause, especially if it would help the tengu out on whole. Of course, me being with Momizi wasn�

Well there you go, as promised. Hopefully these two "true ends" or at least good ends will fulfill a few people who felt Clockwork's plot was a little too grimdark.

If anyone needs anymore loose ends tied up, just gimme a call.

Very nice. Now this is what I was talking about. I can't choose which one I like more.

>>10337

Stop acting like the authors owe it to us to write. They don't. Neither you, me, or anybody else is entitled to a single word these authors grace us with.

>>10347
Dude, you're overreacting. What I meant to say is that if he already felt like this after a month, he could have posted the same now. If he only felt that wya after three months, well, nothing to be done about it.

I certainly don't think anyone is forced to write here, but I think people would have preferred to hear about this sooner rather than later.

>>10350
I'm inclined to agree. Don't feel like writing? Sure. I've been there. I write, and I know how it feels to juggle external expectations and internal desire. There's tension there. But at the same time, it's also a matter of basic courtesy to let us know sooner rather than later. As a reader, I'd like to see you continue this story, but at your own pace, and without worrying about the audience. Just let us know ahead of time that the story is dropped to be picked up later (or not), or that you're working on other stuff, or whatever. You don't even have to apologize or prostrate yourself or justify yourself or anything; you might feel compelled to, but you shouldn't. Even a simple, one-sentence notification ahead of time is better than months of silence.

And, I know it's hard. I know you'd rather avoid it, because it's unpleasant to fail to meet your own (and others') expectations. Again, I've been there, and it sucks. But it's an enormous weight off your chest if you just go out and say, "I can't do this right now. I'd rather move onto other things," than worry about for months, because I know you've been worrying. And the longer you wait, the harder it gets.

>>10016
I wasn't really trying to argue to be honest. I was merely pointing out that these things were not 'odd' 'random' and had 'consistency.'

Sorry if it came off as something else.

One thing that strikes me from the story (and to a lesser extent the discussion): This version of Alice has a very strong mind already.

>>10011

>cannon
"Canon" refers, in context, to original works which fan fiction is inspired by. "Cannon" is a type of artillery piece.
Also, you don't need to capitalize things like "demon", "devil", or "oni", since they're species names and not proper nouns.
Other than that, your technical writing is quite good, and I don't remember seeing any mistakes in it.

>Demons and devils
There are few, if any, consistent features between demons. It's impossible to even tell whether several characters are or were even supposed to be demons or not. (Alice's status as a former human seems to have been a retcon, as she was based on an Alice from another series who was a demon. YuugenMagan, one of the least physically humanoid named characters in Touhou, is also probably a demon.)
However, devils have consistently been winged humanoids with bat wings on their backs. Koakuma had them originally in fanon, and later in a cameo in a canon comic. Three devils, two of which are vampires and all of which are powerful, have also displayed the ability to turn into bats.

>Oni and vampires
The kanji writing of the Japanese word for 'vampire' contains the kanji for 'oni'. Remilia points this out in her route in Immaterial and Missing Power, and in so doing claims to Suika that she is also a type of oni. This is reinforced by the soybean weakness.

However, just because vampires specifically are related to oni may or may not mean that devils as a whole are.

>Youkai and life
...I'll assume you mean the lowest level sapient humanoid youkai, since the real lowest level ones are stage enemies, often without discernible anatomy.
All I can think of regarding death is the difference between clinical death and brain de

Relax guys, we’re all friends here, whether you like it or not.

My apologies for the wait on the update. There happens to be a certain Beta event going on that has sucked my time dry.

>Technical writing
Ah, this makes me feel better. I end up doing the drafting and proofreading on my own so I can get a bit paranoid about quality. I can admit that there are errors you might not have noticed, but I’m not going to point them out.

Also, I always split the drafting and the editing of story updates across multiple days, but I don’t put the same effort into these comments. If these seem chock full of errors, that’s because they are.

>Capitalization
Just gonna rant about stupid creative works from books to video games that have ingrained the bad habit of capitalizing non-human race names into my boyhood psyche. I try and correct it when I see it, but sometimes I slip up.

>Pig fetus
Well I’m not sure about you, but in my old school system dissecting things was a standard experiment all the little kiddies got to enjoy. They started us off with frogs early on and moved on to the big stuff later.

>Death
People die is they are killed…don’t they?

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“Hey!”

“Oh, Ko, how are you? I’m surprised to see you here this early.”

“I’ve had a lot of fun today because of you.”

“Excuse me?”

“I was coming into town on an errand and do you know what happened? Those guards wouldn’t let me in!”

“I see. That’s rather unfortunate. Perhaps their wives laid down the law?”

“Oh, I’ll show them who should lay- that’s not the point. They think I’m a psychotic killer because they were listening to your story!”

“How troublesome. I didn’t mean to inconvenience you.”

“Too late for that, Cupcake. Why did you even tell them I nearly killed you?”

“Because that’s what happened?”

“It’s the truth now? How many of your stories have ever used the truth, huh? I still remember Mokou bust

[x] "Including your wife?"

Doesn't have the slightest idea about what's happening in this story.

That should be enough votes. Closing votes now, and writing.

Posting from my phone because I haven't been home in awhile.

Anyways, trying to upkeep all of my projects caused me to relapse so not only do I not have a computer, I don't have strength to stand at times. The absence of an update is due to a hospital visit plus rest. I feel well enough to type this up, but don't expect anything from me for at least two months. I need to really slow down, and unfortunately, my health is more important than my story.

Keep it real, and I'll catch you on the flipside.

>>9598
How about not-saging? Is that particularly smart?

>>9599
I forgot.

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>>9503
>If this is going to end how I think it ends, YAF might get chased from the site again.

If YAF gets chased out of this site but Kahi is not, there is no justice in this world.

>>9517
I’ll go off on my own.

>>9518
Please don't